Bob & Karina: I just checked my filters and found your e from Tuesday. First time that's ever happened where your e-mail is concerned. I had heavy traffic this week.I edited the English text, compacted and eliminated redundancies and sent it to my designer. (See below.) I wanted to leave max room for some Espanol. I chose four 'graphs for the lady at the Nevada AFL-CIO to work on. I also sent her the full text so that she could absorb the context.
I wrote around the erectile dysfunction and I think the latest draft is sound and strong. Of course, it's your call. "ED" performs the same function as sex vs. gender in my supreme court example -- a distraction. There's nothing more distracting that anything sexual.
Haven't gotten a working proof from my designer as yet.
Lemme know if you want me to stop production for another revision.
Stay safe.
AB
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Subject: Re: Erectile dysfunction in your ad
Date: 2024-03-12 15:43
From: Robert Hager <mr@rhager.com>
To: barbano@frontpage.reno.nv.us
Cc: K Sobredo <ksobredo@gmail.com>
Andy,
I thought about the identical acronym for erectile dysfunction before making the change to "ED" in this text. I decided that we can either delete a couple paragraphs to eliminate any possible confusion about whether a 19-year-old woman's penis couldn't get erect, or we could use an acronym and include a lot more information about the disease and what happened to Chantal and other sufferers of EDs. Let's go with "ED".
Can I see a proof of the one-page ad before it gets sent to the printer? I might want to modify the draft before approving the final.
Thanks.
Bob
==========================Here's what I sent my designer:
Dear Evelyn:
Here's the sorta final. Let's see what it looks like. Don't worry about the Telly awards. They're photogenic but we need the room.
I'm going to get a brief Spanish translation of part of it done, so try leaving a few lines where indicated below.
Thanks for your patience.
AB
================Teach your children well
Support the Chantal Nevada Act
Mandate eating disorder education at all levels
MESSAGE FROM A FATHER
My only daughter, Chantal Claire Hager, died of bulimia, an eating disorder, less than one month after her 19th birthday.
She developed the affliction around age 13 but her family did not become aware and begin treatment until she was 16 years old.
Chantal was sent to the best treatment programs, but sadly the longest she went without relapsing after discharge was only two weeks.
Eating disorders are the number-one killer of American women aged 15 to 25. At any given time, 10% of women aged 18 to 22 suffer from
an eating disorder. Every 52 minutes, someone in the US dies from bulimia or anorexia. Survivors are often emotionally or physically scarred for life.
In taking my daughter Chantal to treatment, I witnessed girls and boys as young as 8 years old in locked-down eating disorder programs. It is now commonplace for children to develop a problem as early as 8. Because even elementary school-age children can develop a negative self-body image that triggers the affliction, education as prevention must start at the elementary level.
In this election year, please talk to your state lawmakers and candidates about this emergency epidemic. Tell them to support a new LAW that [[BEGIN ITALICS]] mandates [[END ITALICS]] eating disorder education at [[BEGIN ITALICS]] every [[END ITALICS]] Nevada public school, beginning at the elementary level.
This year, Reno's new Coral Academy of Science Northwest Elementary School became the first in the Silver State to recognize the need for eating disorder education in the earliest grades. The Chantal Hager Library honors my daughter, who was an alumna of that school.
States across the nation are taking action. Kentucky passed its first eating disorder mandate law in 2019. It is time for Nevada to enact a law that protects [[BEGIN ITALICS]] all [[END ITALICS]] our students.
I know what that silent disease can do to a family.
For more information, see the Chantal Coalition website below.
The lives of your children or those of your friends and loved ones may well depend on it. — Robert Hager
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View the award-winning docudrama [[begin italics]] Love, Chantal: Diary of an Eating Disorder [[end italics]] via our website. (Closed-captioned in Español and many other languages)
E-mail <SizeZero@ChantalCoalition.org> or call (775) 882-TALK. Thank you.
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